Tamara Cherry's second paragraph of her "Victim screams ignored" story on Page 7 of Saturday's Sun left us breathless.
It wasn't the content that left us breathless, it was the word count in the one-sentence paragraph - 64.
That could be a record, folks.
We're talking big city daily, with experienced editors who should know better than to let an awkward 64-word sentence appear in the tabloid.
A veteran Ottawa Sun staffer, reacting to a previous TSF comment about a 45-word lead, says: "I don't even write 45-word paragraphs, let alone a lede."
It wasn't the content that left us breathless, it was the word count in the one-sentence paragraph - 64.
That could be a record, folks.
We're talking big city daily, with experienced editors who should know better than to let an awkward 64-word sentence appear in the tabloid.
A veteran Ottawa Sun staffer, reacting to a previous TSF comment about a 45-word lead, says: "I don't even write 45-word paragraphs, let alone a lede."
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